Tuesday, December 14, 2010

Detective Work

There was glass everywhere and blood stained the yellow carpet. Detectives Brown, Smith, and Adams walked into the foul smelling apartment. Looking at the precise bullet hole between the eyes of the victim, Detective Smith was almost positive that the suspect was a trained killer. Detective Brown took pictures of the scene while Adams looked for signs of a struggle or forced entry, then he dusted the doorknob for fingerprints and took blood samples. While examining the window, Adams opened the curtains to find a shattered window, and then dusted the window frame for fingerprints. There was no evidence of an intruder whatsoever. Meanwhile, Smith determined the time of death to be 6 and a half hours before. Brown shut off the TV, which was still on from when the murder occurred. The detectives regrouped outside the room. "Damn, no signs of forced entry, no fingerprints, no evidence, nothing" said Adams. "We have no leads?" said Smith. "No, we're dealing with a professional" said Adams. "Is there anything we can do now?" said Brown. "I'm afraid not Jim" replied Smith. Three days later, Jim Brown was looking over his photos from the crime scene. A particular photo looking out the window caught his eye. In the background of the picture he saw a building with a roof, which would be a great vantage point. It was the perfect sniper spot.

1 comment:

  1. I love, love, love detective stories, so I was naturally drawn to yours. I get the sense that you've read in this genre before (or seen some old movies). You've got the look and feel down. Nice job describing the setting, and though the ending seems a bit too neat and tidy, for your first piece of microfiction, you've done fine. Don't feel that you have to tie things up; in a story of this length, that's too much to expect and too much to demand of the form. And keep writing mysteries, if you enjoy them.

    Assignment complete = 25/25

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